Your second versions are working much better then the first ones shown in class. Adding color was a good call and really brings life and makes things pop out more.
I think your first deconstructive image (the one with the black lines) works really well. I like how the lines give it a very "dirty" feeling and the text in the background works a lot better than the second version of the same piece.
you may want to try to still switch the boxes in the last one from the right side of the page to the left side of the page. so that it reads left to right. then it reads as it being really dirty, to what people see (we talked about it in class before too. chill drawings though
The text in the second image doesn't work for me. I feel like i'm trying to figure out what it says the entire time and it takes my focus off the actual image...
These have improved tremendously since the last critique; however, something is still bothering me on the first image. The white space has moments of being sort of awkward to me. Maybe trying a couple other arrangements. I don't know if I'm just having a hard time getting of the simplicity of that integrated with the sketch medium, but it could be something to try.
Your second versions are working much better then the first ones shown in class. Adding color was a good call and really brings life and makes things pop out more.
ReplyDeleteI think your first deconstructive image (the one with the black lines) works really well. I like how the lines give it a very "dirty" feeling and the text in the background works a lot better than the second version of the same piece.
ReplyDeleteyou may want to try to still switch the boxes in the last one from the right side of the page to the left side of the page. so that it reads left to right. then it reads as it being really dirty, to what people see (we talked about it in class before too. chill drawings though
ReplyDeleteThe text in the second image doesn't work for me. I feel like i'm trying to figure out what it says the entire time and it takes my focus off the actual image...
ReplyDeleteThese have improved tremendously since the last critique; however, something is still bothering me on the first image. The white space has moments of being sort of awkward to me. Maybe trying a couple other arrangements. I don't know if I'm just having a hard time getting of the simplicity of that integrated with the sketch medium, but it could be something to try.
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