The bottom piece looks a lot better this time. The person within the three boxes looks great, it really completes the image. I love the font type, and I instantly get what you are trying to convey.
I like how you changed the second piece by separating the body into the different cages instead of just having your head and the top and bottom empty. It creates nice movement and i like the simplicity of it. Nice work!
The addition of the full body in between the cages has made your 2nd piece's message become way more clear and also makes it look a lot better overall. Also great choice on the typeface for that piece as well because it adds to the feeling of being trapped, I'd say your second one is stronger but I'd probably find a way to add a bit of color to make it seem less flat.
Your geometric design is extremely effective; the message reads instantly and forces the viewer to think about what you're saying. I think the typeface works as does the placement of the text. My only suggestion would be to try adjusting the text spacing to see if having the edges of the text ("W_________?") be flush with the edges of the cages, just to see how it looks. Overall you did a really nice job.
I think your bottom image is great! It's amazing what filling up those empty cages in your previous design did. I can really feel the anxiety now a lot more. As a person who worked at a doggie daycare in high school, I can relate entirely to your piece. Very effective piece.
I really like the bottom image the best. The layout and idea of it is awesome. I wonder if it would still work as well or even better if the image of the person was the only part that had bars across it being the one caged in. Or if the idea of it is more that you are caged in with them and both in the same boat. I like the font, I think its a Chalet or something similar but maybe see if it works with a type face that is less fun and bubbly? Great job tho! I really like the path you took!
The bottom piece looks a lot better this time. The person within the three boxes looks great, it really completes the image. I love the font type, and I instantly get what you are trying to convey.
ReplyDeleteI like how you changed the second piece by separating the body into the different cages instead of just having your head and the top and bottom empty. It creates nice movement and i like the simplicity of it. Nice work!
ReplyDeleteThe addition of the full body in between the cages has made your 2nd piece's message become way more clear and also makes it look a lot better overall. Also great choice on the typeface for that piece as well because it adds to the feeling of being trapped, I'd say your second one is stronger but I'd probably find a way to add a bit of color to make it seem less flat.
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ReplyDeleteYour geometric design is extremely effective; the message reads instantly and forces the viewer to think about what you're saying. I think the typeface works as does the placement of the text. My only suggestion would be to try adjusting the text spacing to see if having the edges of the text ("W_________?") be flush with the edges of the cages, just to see how it looks. Overall you did a really nice job.
The bottom piece looks great! I really like How the body is in between the cages. It really gives off a sense of being trapped.
ReplyDeleteI think your bottom image is great! It's amazing what filling up those empty cages in your previous design did. I can really feel the anxiety now a lot more. As a person who worked at a doggie daycare in high school, I can relate entirely to your piece. Very effective piece.
ReplyDeleteI really like the bottom image the best. The layout and idea of it is awesome. I wonder if it would still work as well or even better if the image of the person was the only part that had bars across it being the one caged in. Or if the idea of it is more that you are caged in with them and both in the same boat. I like the font, I think its a Chalet or something similar but maybe see if it works with a type face that is less fun and bubbly? Great job tho! I really like the path you took!
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